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05-24-2001, 02:17 PM
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Hi, this is a comission I am working on and I'd like to hear a critique before I finish it.

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05-24-2001, 02:24 PM
Suz, this is just beautiful. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gifCan't find anything to critique. To me, it even looks finished.


05-24-2001, 02:30 PM
Thanks Unni, I am a little paranoid about this after reading DJ's adventure with her comission. I am posting progress pictures, so I can get a reading early.


05-24-2001, 02:35 PM
Hate to be an echo, but this is just beautiful! I think they will be very pleased!

05-24-2001, 02:43 PM
if you showed any of your other stuff, this must be consistent and excellent. Boosting contrast doens't make it better.
it is very alive edge to edge.

05-24-2001, 03:32 PM
Suz...I made a copy of your painting to point out a couple of areas in the background that could be lightened up to bring the horse forward and differentiate.
The areas I changed were around the horse's head and mane...a lighter green.
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I forgot to add that I think this is a great painting!! Great job on both the horse and young girl. Is this oil?

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05-24-2001, 05:46 PM
suz,,,,the background is distracting. among other things, it has the same texture as the horse's mane.

and depending on whether or not you want emphasis there, the head gets lost a teeny bit because it is dark against dark.

the girl's arm is too heavy. the elbow that you've squared off makes her arm thicker.....{M}

"it's alright to be judgmental,,,,,,,,if you have taste"...MILT

05-24-2001, 09:11 PM
Hi Beverly, and Milt,
It's good to hear from both of you. Thanks for the feedback.


05-31-2001, 09:23 PM
I love your piece...I must agree, though, with the fact that the horse's nose could be brought forward...since, I presume, the commision was to get the horse and the person. Other than that, it looks great! I am sure you will be pleased with the commissioner's response...best of luck...ginia

06-01-2001, 12:06 AM
One other minor comment I see on this peice is that the horse's halter seems too thick right over the top of the nose since there seems to be pressure from the lead on the underside. I agree that the background too could be altered some to bring out the horses head more. Overall a very nice peice though, as is!

Cathy Sheeter
Sheeter Zoo Crew Animal Art

06-01-2001, 03:23 PM
Thanks for your comments!
I met with my client and with the help of my laptop and Corel, we made the changes you sugested.
- lighter background
- thinner halter
- and a little darker horse (because otherwise it looks bleeched as horses look when they are in the sun too long)

She is very happy so far, and maybe I can wrap it up this weekend.

Thanks again, and I'll post the finished version.


06-01-2001, 03:35 PM
Suz.... I tend to like "lost" edges in paintings and think the dark mane against the dark background is fine. I understand about making things "pop out" with contrast, but not everything has to. IMO, it is more effective, when you are discreet about what pops out and doesn't. I think this is very attractive as is. ---Jane

06-03-2001, 10:10 AM
Hi, I worked on this again and here is the current version. Thanks for your help.
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Dave Carter
06-03-2001, 10:24 AM
The horse's eye needs a bit of twinkle. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif

06-03-2001, 10:40 AM
After reading previous posts, I guess the last thing you need is more input. In any event...here’s my $0.02! The rump of the horse “reads” too close to its withers. Foreshortening may be improved by letting the rump go off the page and thus eliminating a downward curving contour.

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