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Phyllis Rennie
02-16-2001, 07:09 PM
Oil 14 x 18

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Sorry it's a little crooked. And the blue is not quite as strong as my computer makes it look. Thoughts, advise, criticism??????

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tammy
02-16-2001, 09:31 PM
Sorry, Phyllis but everything you do looks so good it's hard to critisize I mean critique.
I like it, but never heard of the flower before.

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create4life
02-16-2001, 11:42 PM
I love this. Want to buy it for my mom. she loves chairs and putting plants on them! very beautiful! lovely! is it for sale?

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dzspag
02-17-2001, 10:12 AM
hi phyllis...nice job...just one little tiny eeensie thing bothers me..don't know if you can go back into this and correct...the perspective (elipses) on the spindles is not consistent..they need to be going in the same direction..some of yours dip down..some dip up...otherwise..nice piece.

Cap
02-17-2001, 03:50 PM
Blooming lovely! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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Phyllis Rennie
02-18-2001, 09:40 PM
Originally posted by create4life:
I love this. Want to buy it for my mom. she loves chairs and putting plants on them! very beautiful! lovely! is it for sale?



I would sell it --- but maybe we should let the paint dry first?

Phyllis Rennie
02-18-2001, 09:46 PM
Hi Dee, I did see the mistake on the spindles but it went out of my mind as fast as it went in!!! The paint is still very fresh so I'm sure I can fix it. Thanks.

Phyllis Rennie
05-23-2001, 08:57 PM
This one has been overpainted "ad nauseaum". But I think I learned something doing it.

Question: Do you prefer version two? Why or why not? Thanks.

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Unni
05-24-2001, 06:07 AM
Phyllis, I like it, I mean the first version (purely personal though) http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif. Nice work.

Unni

rsmak
05-24-2001, 09:11 AM
I like version 1 better, I do not know why, just by feeling.
rosanna

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sandge
05-28-2001, 07:27 PM
Phyllis, I prefer the second version. To my eye the tonal relationships are much more satisfactory in no2. I love what you have done to the chair and the background.

I do find the relationship between the bottom of the pot and the edge of the canvas problematic.

Which version do you prefer and why? http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif

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Phyllis Rennie
05-28-2001, 09:51 PM
I definitely prefer version 2. I think the overall value arrangment is better. Is that the same as "tonal relationships"?? This way the chair merges more into the background and the flowers become a stronger center of interest. And I think the better value arrangment allows the colors to play off each other.

Do you think the pot should have been moved back further on the chair?? So it didn't touch the edge?? Not that I'm going to change it again--so much paint on this one already!!!! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

sandge
05-28-2001, 09:57 PM
Originally posted by Phyllis Rennie:
I think the overall value arrangment is better. Is that the same as "tonal relationships"??


Yes, I think so. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

Originally posted by Phyllis Rennie:
Do you think the pot should have been moved back further on the chair?? So it didn't touch the edge??

Further back or even (if it were possible) further forward so less is seen. Touching the edge looks a bit awkward (to me).

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Rahat Ayub
05-28-2001, 10:14 PM
I vote for version 2.

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arteitaliana
05-28-2001, 11:09 PM
i think that the second version is better. More contrast. Sandra knows what she is talking about...I agree with her. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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Fagan
05-28-2001, 11:15 PM
I like the second version better. The white flowers were too stark. You have a lovely warm glow to the chair. This is lovely.

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Pen
05-29-2001, 01:05 AM
Originally posted by Fagan:
I like the second version better. The white flowers were too stark. You have a lovely warm glow to the chair. This is lovely.



I agree with you, Fagan. In the first painting, those white flowers stole all the attention. The second version allows one to comfortably see the rest of the painting without the eyes being constantly snapped back to those flowers.



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Phyllis Rennie
05-29-2001, 09:03 PM
Originally posted by sandrafletcher:
Further back or even (if it were possible) further forward so less is seen. Touching the edge looks a bit awkward (to me).

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You're probably right. This poor painting has suffered from lack of planning from the very beginning. Thanks for all your advise--once again!

Phyllis Rennie
05-29-2001, 09:06 PM
Originally posted by Pen:
I agree with you, Fagan. In the first painting, those white flowers stole all the attention. The second version allows one to comfortably see the rest of the painting without the eyes being constantly snapped back to those flowers.



More evidence that the value arrangment was poor in the first version. Thanks for all the imput, everyone. Now if I can just transfer what I learned by doing this again to future paintings. Don't want to do them all twice!!



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dornberg
05-29-2001, 09:30 PM
the positioning of the chair and plant relative to the picture edges is interesting

Victor
05-29-2001, 09:53 PM
I love this painting too. It does you credit
Vic

jerryW
05-30-2001, 06:08 AM
I think that it has become simpler overall, the colors are more ballanced and the features of objects which were difficult have become subsumed into a painting which is satisfying.

Esben Lund
05-30-2001, 06:30 AM
It's not bad at all, but I would recommend paying more attention to the composition in future works.
I find it rather claustrophobic, infact it looks like a detail of a bigger picture. The flowers are "imprisoned" by the bars (chair) on the right. I would have mirrored the picture (chair on the left side) and zoomed out.

Happy painting.

Phyllis Rennie
05-30-2001, 08:53 PM
Originally posted by Esben Lund:

I find it rather claustrophobic,

Perhaps. But as a professional interior designer, I know that one person feels claustrophobic in the same room that another finds cozy and intimate. And one feels exposed and threatened in a room that another feels is spacious and airy.


it looks like a detail of a bigger picture.

You're right. That is not always characteristic of my paintings but it often is. I don't mind if the viewer has to use his imagination to "see" the part of the picture that is off the canvas.

Happy painting.

Thanks for sharing your thoughts and feelings.