View Full Version : The train from the beach

05-04-2003, 11:58 PM
<img src="http://www.neoncrunch.on.ca/pix/beachtrain.jpg" alt="16X20 acrylic on canvas">
source photo Greece circa 1958
painted may 4 2003

05-05-2003, 12:04 AM
While i can say i really like the perspective, and the "scruffyness" of the picture, i find the fact that their noses seem to be a little indistinct a little off putting.

I don;t know that you would want to put noses on them though, but you might consider adding just a little shading to make it look like they are there.

05-05-2003, 01:27 AM
The people in your paintings have always shown a level of dominance that is very intreguing (sp?). Personally I like the last 2 paintings you did a bit more than this one, but thats not saying much since all of them are good.

Its rather ingenious how the verticle lines appear to be straight when looking at it, but in reality they are quite bent. The excitement I gather from the figure on the left has me thinking she is about to pull her shirt up, but this isnt a mardi gras parade :)

precipuus work

have fun,


05-05-2003, 02:24 AM
I like how you make the (usual not working) even number of people work compositionally by offsetting them with the odd number of windows/sections (if that was intended).
The piece has a good feeling to it and it connects with the viewer though the direct eye/face contact with the viewer. Usually your work is more disrupted with shapes/colors, that would be the only thing I miss but that's only cause I have seen your others:D
My favorite is the one on (my) right. I think she holds the viewer and blocks him from departing with her grounded attitude/pose. Nice work:)

05-05-2003, 04:41 AM
I like this very much.
Suggestive painting, good composition, good value pattern.
I feel the movement of a starting train.

05-05-2003, 06:31 AM
Jerry, Haven't commented on the last couple of your paintings because I'm running out of things to say about them...

Beautiful, wonderful, spectacular, inspiring, light-filled.

Oh well, here's to redundancy. Your paintings rule.


Wayne Gaudon
05-05-2003, 06:49 AM
.... I'm running out of things to say about them... Beautiful, wonderful, spectacular, inspiring, light-filled.

echo ..echo .. echo ..

05-05-2003, 10:11 AM
Wayne Gaudon { you have become a canyon }

London { trying not to repeat myself too}

capricorne {nice to hear from you - thanks evoked response}

Luzie { the source image had an odd number of people and was much more horizontal, my main change was to angle the whole thing more and turn it vertical, losing a body in the process }

bocote { it means a lot from you, what got me about the source photo was how they were pushing out of the windows for the photographer - some of that silliness remains. }

Bendaini {the noses are there in brighter paint similar to real life, extruding from the surface - it seemed enough, outlining or mroe detailing seemed to collapse the rest of the painting which is more important, so I reverted.}

05-05-2003, 01:53 PM
Hey, Jerry....all are fresh and bright to our hungry eyes!
love this train visit...tourists...lol

05-05-2003, 01:59 PM
simmilar but different

05-05-2003, 02:12 PM
Every set of posted critters give me the chuckles. your train people are excellent as always

05-05-2003, 04:42 PM
All of the above and another vote for the wonderful tension created by the (not) vertical lines...