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Kashifa
05-22-2001, 04:42 PM
Its completed but i am not satisfied with my this work. What about you Guys http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif


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AmyH
05-22-2001, 05:50 PM
why are you not satisfied...ask yourself, turn it upside down...look at it in a mirror, and ask why, why, why.

TeAnne
05-22-2001, 06:43 PM
Holy, you are kidding right? What is not to be happy about this??????????????
God, I would die to paint like this!!!!!!!!!!
Maybe some of your surrounding colours in the vase is all that is needed.

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tammy
05-22-2001, 07:28 PM
I love it. looks great.

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jerryW
05-22-2001, 07:57 PM
I see a difficulty with the weight of the spittoon-flowerpot.


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Impulse
05-22-2001, 08:07 PM
I like it. The flowers, the leafs and the background have a harmony in their tones. The pot steps out in a brighter shinier monochromatic style that is on its own. Alone and with compatible objects it is very well rendered. With these objects it may loose some appeal. I can't tell whether I am agreeing with Jerry or not. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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Esben Lund
05-23-2001, 07:34 AM
The flowers are beatiful but the vase needs some attention http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
It looks like you just couldn't figure it out and ended up hiding it in the background.
Look closer at the vase. Where is it standing?
Right now it's flying above the table http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Move it down a little and give it a solid shadow. Move it closer by sharpening the edges, adding more contrast in light/shadow.
The vase is the foundation of the whole picture, pull it out of the background by changing the coulour and values as well as edges and contrast. Hope this helps http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

GC
05-23-2001, 09:46 AM
I second what was said by:
Jerry, Impulse & Esben Lund.

It's the vase.

Ginette

JeanineJ
05-23-2001, 09:56 AM
Agreeing with vase comments... and would add a suggestion to vary the background treatment behind the vase... for example, make left the darker side that blurs with vase, and right slightly lighter so sharp edge stands out...

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Kashifa
05-23-2001, 09:57 AM
Originally posted by Esben Lund:
The flowers are beatiful but the vase needs some attention :)
It looks like you just couldn't figure it out and ended up hiding it in the background.
Look closer at the vase. Where is it standing?
:D your comments make me laugh, you are so right, I did same with poor vase. Actually i worked so hard with the flowers and at the end, i couldnt treated good with my poor vase.
Your correction is so helpful for me. Thanks.:)

rsmak
05-23-2001, 10:14 AM
Overall,it is beautiful,and the colour is great, but somehow,I feel there is lack of life in the flowers,they are too artificial looking...
rosanna

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vance
05-23-2001, 10:45 AM
Your use of color is super; I also like the blending that you acheived in the background - I do agree that the vase looks a little unfinished - not quite balanced somehow : )

Vance

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Unni
05-23-2001, 01:06 PM
Kashifa, Nice work. I like it. However, I think I should agree with Rosanna as regards life in the flowers. Some more touching needs to be done with the vase. Overall, the work is good.

Unni

price
03-28-2006, 07:51 PM
I love the it..

laurghita
03-29-2006, 12:29 AM
If I remove the vase from the picture I cant guess where is the source of light.

Corby
03-29-2006, 01:10 AM
This is very attractive and reveals a great deal of talent. It does have issues but I feel they are only color issues. Replace that passage of pink in the foreground with the same green that is on the wall, maybe a bit darker. Then take the blue vase and change it too a copper pot. It would have been copper anyway. The flowers and the leaves are beautiful as they are.

newsteve11381
03-29-2006, 02:46 PM
beautiful to me even if there is something wrong with the vase. I have never seen a painting that there wasnt something wrong with it. Even all the masterpieces have errors. Thats what makes them alive and always a work in progress. I have come to the conclusion that i will never be done with a painting. You should be satisfied.

Dana Design
03-29-2006, 06:28 PM
Its completed but i am not satisfied with my this work. What about you Guys http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif


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It appears as though the flowers are far too strong, too top heavy for the pot holding them. Looks as tho' the pot is tumbling forward toward the viewer.

The pot definitely needs more definition. You need to ground the pot with some shading/shadow. A light source also needs to be defined with some highlights.....where is your light coming from?

The pink in the foreground doesn't seem to work with this at all! Where is that pink coming from? Perhaps a lighter blue instead with a darker blue receding into and under the vase.

This still has real possibilities so don't quit yet.