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GC
05-21-2001, 03:03 PM
Just finished.
11 x 14

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Thanksk for comments & looking

Ginette

ZOTMA
05-21-2001, 03:31 PM
Beautiful color and I like the consistant treatment throughout. I feel like I see half the fruit bowl and there's a loss of depth behind it. Perhaps using the same darkness of shadow that you've got going in the lower left hand corner behind the bowl would give a bit more dimension. Just an idea though it looks very nice now.

dornberg
05-21-2001, 04:28 PM
i like the curved bowl top with the objects aboce it
i wonder what it would be like to make a similar curve under the pear,
using another leaf toward the left side to form the curve with the lesf tops
the idea is to repeat the curve and strengthen the idea
its just an idea

TeAnne
05-21-2001, 04:43 PM
That is one really cool painting. WOW
I think though, just one stroke to indicate that the bowel has another side to it. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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Impulse
05-21-2001, 05:41 PM
Loverly composition. Great colors. I wish those leaves were out of the picture. Nice work. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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jerryW
05-21-2001, 05:44 PM
Love it!
it must have been so satisfying to get all that color in there.
I must let the others have their way with you.

Fagan
05-21-2001, 05:51 PM
I agree with Impulse about the leaves. Also the background is a little too busy next to the grapes, making it hard to see what exactly you have there. (Maybe a change in color? or darker?)The green vase needs to either come in or out of the painting. Look at the top of your two vessels on the left. The openings are not consistent. Your shadows are not consistent. If you are showing the light source from the upper right? (as looking at the bottom left side is darker as if in shadow.) Or if the light source is from the upper left side as shown on your vases and bowl. I know you are perfectly able to pull this painting off, so I hope you do not mind my comments. This would have been better suited to a triangle composition. You have a great start on this painting. I hope these suggestions are helpful.

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GC
05-21-2001, 07:17 PM
Thanks everybody, (to use Jerry's words)
... for having your way with me.

All input is greatly appreciatd and evaluated.
I already see things that past me by before.
I learn more each time I put a painting up on the forum. So thanks again.

Ginette

fink
05-21-2001, 07:52 PM
The painting is wonderful. The grapes look like you can see though them - nice! If it were mine (remember I am the queen of cropping) I would crop it just below the bowl and leave a hint of the leaves.

GC
05-22-2001, 01:36 AM
I will change a few things first thing in the morning and repost.
Thanks all!!!

Ginette

Robert
05-22-2001, 09:18 AM
This is so open and free! It's like...dancing!

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Bob

bobsart
05-22-2001, 04:51 PM
Nice color contrast. My only "real" problem is the vase. Perspective (as mentioned previously) and the cropping of the vase that causes the "open" vase handle. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

GC
05-22-2001, 05:13 PM
Originally posted by Fagan:
I agree with Impulse about the leaves. Also the background is a little too busy next to the grapes, making it hard to see what exactly you have there. (Maybe a change in color? or darker?)The green vase needs to either come in or out of the painting. Look at the top of your two vessels on the left. The openings are not consistent. Your shadows are not consistent. If you are showing the light source from the upper right? (as looking at the bottom left side is darker as if in shadow.) Or if the light source is from the upper left side as shown on your vases and bowl. I know you are perfectly able to pull this painting off, so I hope you do not mind my comments. This would have been better suited to a triangle composition. You have a great start on this painting. I hope these suggestions are helpful.


Thanks Beverly,

I appreciate the remarks for the make me take a second look.
The light source is from the upper left.
The vessels do block the light from getting in to that corner and that makes it a bid darker.
The digital photo shows more contrast as the painting, (draw back of digital as well as RGB monitor view, that the darks & lights often seem more intense.)

The white spots throughout the painting are reflections from taking the picture (even thought no flash was used)
but the ceiling light made all the paint bumps jump out as white dots. GRRR

I thought about the green vessel being half out of the painting, but I did that because, I somehow wanted to suggest that there are more vessels beyond what the eye can see, more things on the table that is not in the picture.
That's my photography background.
I try not to put everything neatly on the canvas as if framed. Sometimes I do, but sometimes I want to do something different.

It all may backfire, when I try to sell this baby and nobody wants it.
Then I have egg on my face.

Thanks for the great advise, that I will consider in the future.
I will darken the area behind the grapes a bid or suggest the back of the bowl.

Ginette

GC
05-22-2001, 05:20 PM
Originally posted by dornberg:
i like the curved bowl top with the objects aboce it
i wonder what it would be like to make a similar curve under the pear,
using another leaf toward the left side to form the curve with the lesf tops
the idea is to repeat the curve and strengthen the idea
its just an idea

Your recommendation made me think a lot.
I never thought of repeating lines, curves etc. But I will in the future pay more careful attention to that.
I never studies painting or composition.
What comes out, is just basically from my gut feelings. I think a bit of formal training may be a good idea.

I read most of your comments on others work too and have learned a lot.

Thanks for sharing your knowledge.
Ginette

bri
05-22-2001, 05:38 PM
Hi Ginette!

Hey that's pretty lively. You don't see that much with this type of thing...its wet and crunchy and makes me want to have a fresh salad! The background area is really sweet and the scattering of color gives it a very saturated feel. This truly makes me want to eat and paint. Nice piece.

In terms of critique the red piece of fruit in the left side of bowl seems to be wanting its share of surrounding color. The neck and lip of the green vwessel are so nice I want to see just a tad more of them, but that's just a personal preference. Good mood.

---bri

dghoweth
05-22-2001, 07:30 PM
I LOVE IT , WOULDN'T CHANGE A THING

tammy
05-22-2001, 08:00 PM
I too, like it just fine as is. Some of the detail was enough to catch my eye.

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