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Fagan
05-19-2001, 04:08 PM
This is a 20" x 24" oil on canvas painting I did several months ago. I have not had real good feedback on this painting. Please critique ...what in your opinion is not quite right about this painting? Thanks!

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cleo
05-19-2001, 07:13 PM
Ice,snow, water? beats me. 2 is a wonderful
number until you try to tell a story.

The perspective is great!

Good practice.

cleo


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TeAnne
05-19-2001, 07:16 PM
I remember seeing this one, I loved it then and I love it now. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

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Impulse
05-19-2001, 07:23 PM
Hi Bev,

I like this painting a whole lot -- especially your colors.

Things I noticed:

The cloud's left edge seems kind of harsh and jagged and tries to blend into the sky. I think it need softer round edge on the left and better definition.

Same goes for the witish paint in the sky left of the cloud. I can't tell whether it sky or cloud.

finally the circled area in the right centre need to stand up and be counted -- it needs an identity in my opinion.

Ok, finally finally the trees that i cirlced don't sit right with me and i wish i knew why.

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dornberg
05-19-2001, 07:46 PM
the distance in the painting goes far back
the relation of the two stacks is rather close
the stacks are to me more important than the hills in the background,
and i would rather not leave the stacks to make the long journey back
if you brought the background up close to the stacks, you might have more feedback and support for the stacks
as well as better interplay between the stacks and the background

ZOTMA
05-19-2001, 08:09 PM
right, dornberg nailed it (IMO). I think the colors are brilliant and all else feels good to me, love the puddles.

JeanineJ
05-19-2001, 08:59 PM
Great comments here... I still like this one a lot!
The composition is strained a bit by the light going off right... the classics tend to keep the edges darker and light pattern inside the painting...

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Yax
05-19-2001, 09:05 PM
I like the way you pushed the intensity of the colors. Very nice. Yax http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

Fagan
05-19-2001, 09:43 PM
Thank you Cleo...it is waterpuddles. *SMILE*

Thanks TeAnne

Impulse...thank you for giving me your critique! It is very helpful...I knew something was just not right with this painting.

dornberg..again you are right on the money! Thank you *SMILE* I will need to get my oils out again. I read somewhere that painting with oils can give you liver problems. I put them up and have been painting mainly in acrylics. I miss the oils!

Zotma and Jeanine...thank you for your comments!

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tammy
05-19-2001, 11:25 PM
Well, if you think you really must change anything, take out the trees completely from the second haystack on up to the first one, but leave in the small cluster of trees that are in the distance. Then I'd bring the yellow and blue sky on down behind the stacks, and leave or extend the mountains behind the stacks too. Would look like stacks on an extended open plain.
If all that sounds extreme or too much tinkering, I just don't see what's wrong with the way it looks now.
I liked it the first time too.

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